Everybody needs somebody else to be their dentist, their lawyer, their doctor, AND THEIR EDITOR. Period. End of discussion. If you think otherwise, you are a fool.
Period.
The emphasis here doesn't quite work for me; maybe try cutting "end of discussion" entirely, then moving "If you think otherwise..." to a new paragraph? That would give this a much sharper rhythm.
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branchandroot
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Date: 2004-09-21 03:19 pm (UTC)Period.
The emphasis here doesn't quite work for me; maybe try cutting "end of discussion" entirely, then moving "If you think otherwise..." to a new paragraph? That would give this a much sharper rhythm.
Thing 1, editor-at-large, running and ducking.